I would like to share this poem, anything wrong, please correct me!


Oh! I'm mother earth!

Big and round;

Can't you see this beautiful planet,

Shiny and blue.

But I feel sad and angry!

Human of this world,

Do not care about the environment!

They litter, they pollute, they destroy ..


Oh, how I suffer,

How I suffer!

The ozone layer is depleting,

And the sun is destroying me!


Oh, I feel sick; Oh, so sick!

But it's not too late for us!

There is still hope and reuse!


Save the world ... ... save me!

Since this is a poem, the poet has poetic license, and can manipulate the language in unusual ways.

With that in mind, there is nothing wrong with this poem.

quote:

Human of this world,

Do not care about the environment!

They litter, they pollute, they destroy ..

True, poetic license might be allowed (as a child, I always wondered who issued such licenses and what I would have to do to get one ) But I find the punctuation and switch in pronouns and the subject-verb agreement really confusing here.

Human of this world , sounds like direct address (the comma does that)

Do not care about the environment! Is this a command to the human - telling the human that he/she shouldn't care? I don't think that is what is intended.

They litter, they pollute, they destroy Now we have a plural subject.

I think you intended something like this:

(The) Humans of this world
do not care about the environment.
They litter, they pollute, they destroy

Is that closer to what you wanted to say?

That's good, Okaasan.

And very funny, too, about how one could obtain a poetic license!

I never did get an answer on the license question. I just remember a teacher (7th grade??) telling us that we weren't good enough yet (in writing) to use poetic license. So what qualifies one to use it?