Hello, Kyle, and welcome to the Grammar Exchange!
Thank you for sharing your love letter with us. I hope it's successful.
Unfortunately, it does contain some grammatical errors (mainly errors of punctuation, but some errors of other types), and we don't edit things for people at this site.
If you have a grammatical question about one of the sentences, try to identify what it is about the grammar that troubles you. Then you can start a discussion thread related to that specific question and grammatical topic.