and I forgot almost everything about him

Are these sentences correct:

1) He is the kind of person you spend an hour with and he changes your vision of the world.

2) He was the man I spent an hour with and he changed my vision of the world.

3) He is the famous actor we met last night and you couldn't remember his name.

4) He is a man who talked to me at a party a month ago and I forgot almost everything about  him.

 

Gratefully,

Navi

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navi posted:

Are these sentences correct:

Hello, Navi,

I'm going to take them one by one.

navi posted:

1) He is the kind of person you spend an hour with and he changes your vision of the world.

The idea of the relative clause is supposed to be "You spend an hour with him and he changes your vision of the world," which is a conditional phrased as two conjoined clauses. "You spend an hour with him" is really subordinated to "he changes your vision of the world," as it is in "He changes your vision of the world if you spend an hour with him."

The subordination of "you spend an hour with him" is lost within the two conjunct clauses of your relative clause, so that the sentence doesn't make sense except as nonsense, where "and he changes your vision of the world" is a separate independent clause, capable of being punctuated as a separate sentence. Since that's not the intended meaning, I recommend changing to this:

1a) He is the kind of person who changes your vision of the world if you you spend an hour with him.

navi posted:
2) He was the man I spent an hour with and he changed my vision of the world.

That one is correct only if it is it is interpreted as consisting of two independent clauses:

2') He was the man I spent an hour with. And he changed my vision of the world.

Another way of phrasing that idea would be to use two conjoined relative clauses:

2a) He was the man WHOM I spent an hour with and WHO changed my vision of the world.

navi posted:
3) He is the famous actor we met last night and you couldn't remember his name.
4) He is a man who talked to me at a party a month ago and I forgot almost everything about  him.

Again, those are fine only if they are interpreted as containing two independent clauses:

3') He is the famous actor we met last night. And you couldn't remember his name.
4') He is a man who talked to me at a party a month ago. And I forgot almost everything about  him.

They, too, could be rephrased with two relative clauses apiece. But perhaps it would make more sense here to use double relative clauses (no conjunction) rather than conjoined relative clauses.

3a) He is the famous actor WHOM we met last night WHOSE NAME you couldn't remember.
4a) He is a man WHO talked to me at a party a month ago WHOM I forgot almost everything about.
 
In (3a), "whose name you couldn't remember" restrictively modifies "the famous actor whom we met last night," thus indicating that you met more than one famous actor last night. The referent of  "you" could not remember the name of only one of those famous actors you met last night, namely, him. Sentence (4a) works similarly.

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