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1. A University of Hawaii team led by Dr. Craig Smith found the crabs using a remotely operated submersible. 

2. The man’s attorney asked that he be admitted to a mental hospital because he was insane.

3. The sisters were reunited after 38 years at the I-10 rest area.

I have gone through so many sentences for my homework assignment and am stuck on these three. These are the instructions for the assignment:

Find the error or issue in each item and correct it. It may involve a misspelling, a wrong word,  subject-verb agreement, or some other grammatical error. It may be improperly punctuated or may be awkwardly phrased. Be certain that you clearly identify the problem before fixing it. 

Thank you in advance for your help!

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@plshelpme posted:

1. A University of Hawaii team led by Dr. Craig Smith found the crabs using a remotely operated submersible.

2. The man’s attorney asked that he be admitted to a mental hospital because he was insane.

3. The sisters were reunited after 38 years at the I-10 rest area.

Hello, @plshelpme, and welcome to the Grammar Exchange.

I think (1) can be improved by adding "by": by using a remotely operated submersible.

(2) is ambiguous as to who should be admitted to the mental hospital for being insane: the man or his attorney?

(3) is ambiguous as to what the I-10 rest area represents: the place of reunion or the place where the sisters stayed during 38 years?

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@plshelpme posted:

(2) I believe the man, not the attorney, should be admitted. I am just not sure how to fix it without adding or deleting many words.

I know it is the man, not his attorney, the one who was likely to need mental attention. The point is that, being in the genitive case, it is not syntactically clear. The sentence could be fixed as follows:

- The attorney asked that his client / his principal, who was insane, be admitted to a mental hospital. (An attorney can be a lawyer (an attorney-at-law), in which case he acts for his client, or an agent (an attorney-in-fact), in which case he acts for his principal, that is, for the person who appointed him to act on his behalf.)

@plshelpme posted:

(3) I believe the rest area refers to the place of the reunion. Again, I am just not sure how to move it around or what to add to it to make the sentence correct.

Again, the position of the adverbial of place after "38 years" makes the sentence ambiguous. A possible recast would be:

- After 38 years, the sisters were reunited at the I-10 rest area.

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