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See the bold below:

Enter the conversation with respect, bond over a value you genuinely have in common with them, and then connect that shared value to global heating.

The reader doesn't see the ", and then" until they get to that part of the sentence. So is it all bad or odd if the ", and then" then retroactively signals to the reader that the previous units are all to be understood as a sequence?

Why not add the bold below?

Enter the conversation with respect, then bond over a value you genuinely have in common with them, and then connect that shared value to global heating.

Or even add the bold below?

Enter the conversation with respect, and then bond over a value you genuinely have in common with them, and then connect that shared value to global heating.

Last edited by Andrew Van Wagner
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