I am more proficient in English than my native language due to the age at which I immigrated from Romania to America, but despite a strong academic background I still struggle often with deciding the most grammatically appropriate way for writing my sentences. I often delete and rewrite sentences repeatedly, rearranging words, and finally going with something that I don't think is ideal, but that will have to suffice because I can't afford to spend any more time editing.
I appreciate any help in improving the grammar of some snippets of writing that I found challenging to construct and am uncertain about. Hopefully over time I can learn from your feedback not only how to structure sentences better but identify negative patterns or mistakes I am making that I can avoid or replace with better strategies. So please point out any that you recognize, especially those that I might look up and find useful guides/examples.
Here is one short paragraph that I would like feedback for improving grammar:
"This talk makes many of the same points as Dr. Cool in his blog that I linked above, Too Cool for School. For example, he wrote that "I'm cool and I know it." Which is the same point Fool makes in his talk at the place linked in the video. Dr. Cool also makes several other points that align well with this talk, like emphasizing the significance of biases for impacting other people and the importance of asking why certain beliefs are ascribed to."