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I am more proficient in English than my native language due to the age at which I immigrated from Romania to America, but despite a strong academic background I still struggle often with deciding the most grammatically appropriate way for writing my sentences. I often delete and rewrite sentences repeatedly, rearranging words, and finally going with something that I don't think is ideal, but that will have to suffice because I can't afford to spend any more time editing.

I appreciate any help in improving the grammar of some snippets of writing that I found challenging to construct and am uncertain about. Hopefully over time I can learn from your feedback not only how to structure sentences better but identify negative patterns or mistakes I am making that I can avoid or replace with better strategies. So please point out any that you recognize, especially those that I might look up and find useful guides/examples.

Here is one short paragraph that I would like feedback for improving grammar:

"This talk makes many of the same points as Dr. Cool in his blog that I linked above, Too Cool for School. For example, he wrote that "I'm cool and I know it." Which is the same point Fool makes in his talk at the place linked in the video. Dr. Cool also makes several other points that align well with this talk, like emphasizing the significance of biases for impacting other people and the importance of asking why certain beliefs are ascribed to."

 
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Hello, Empathy, and welcome to the Grammar Exchange.

Thank you for sharing some details of your life with us.

At GE we try to dispel doubts about grammar and are eager to discuss any grammatical issues our members can submit to us, but we don't do proofreading. If you have any specific doubts, you can ask us about them.

Just this once I will highlight some things that, in my opinion, you could consider improving:

@Empathy posted:
 

 This talk makes many of the same points as Dr. Cool in his blog that I linked above, Too Cool for School. For example, he wrote that "I'm cool and I know it." Which is the same point Fool makes in his talk at the place linked in the video. Dr. Cool also makes several other points that align well with this talk, like emphasizing the significance of biases for impacting other people and the importance of asking why certain beliefs are ascribed to."

Last edited by Gustavo, Contributor

Oh, of course, no problem. Is there a post with forum rules anywhere that I can refer to? I looked around but couldn't find one. I just want to make sure I am clear on what constitutes proofreading and become aware of other important criteria. What I posted wasn't intended for anything official. But I should have checked for a page with the community rules before posting it.

No problem, Empathy.

Our forum came into being more than 18 years ago and, as you can imagine, things have changed a lot since then, though its essence continues to be the same.

Here you can find an old posting by our late moderator which contains some of the main guidelines published on the 4th anniversary of the forum.

After that, in 2013 an important addition was made to clarify which topics are not welcome.

In 2014 a maximum of postings per day was set.

In 2018, David, our current moderator, published a guideline on the use of quotes.

Asking us to proofread a text is not asking a question of grammar. There are many references to GE not being a proofreading service, like here or here.

David and I do this for pleasure and can only afford to answer questions subject to the restrictions stated above.

Thanking you for your understanding, we hope to see one of your questions here soon.

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