Is there a reason to break up this construction?

Andrew Van WagnerMember

My instinct is to prefer (1) over (2), but is there any basis for this or is this just a weird and random preference of mine?

(1) A person will call for diplomacy and receive—in return—non sequiturs.

(2) A person will call for diplomacy and receive non sequiturs.

12/21/2211:07 AM

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David, ModeratorModerator

Hi, Andrew—"In return" communicates that the non sequiturs come in response to the person's call for diplomacy. There is no need for em dashes. You could just place "in return" at the end or use commas to set the phrase off:

A person will call for diplomacy and receive non sequiturs in return.
A person will call for diplomacy and receive, in return, non sequiturs.
A person will call for diplomacy and, in return, receive non sequiturs.

12/21/228:19 PM

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