Parallel sentences, needed or not needed.

Hi.

 What do you think of parallel sentence structure? This means using the same pattern of words to show that two or more ideas have the same level of importance. This can apply to words, phrases, or clauses.

Is this a must, or a just a style of writing?

I recently wrote about a man entranced by a  pile of diamonds:

"Dazzling, hypnotic, as the multicoloured waterfall caught the lights."

But i was told off, stating that it should be dazzling, hypnotising,

What do you think? Is it a rule to be strictly obeyed, sometimes obeyed, or is it just an optional writing style? I am getting conflicting points of view

Many thanks. John.

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john121 posted:
But i was told off, stating that it should be dazzling, hypnotising,

Hi, John: Thanks for beginning a new thread for this question, the topic of which is different from that of your first thread. Coincidentally, however, you have written something here that relates to the earlier thread. Can you identify the subject of "stating" in the sentence quoted above as you have written it?

john121 posted:

What do you think of parallel sentence structure?

I think it's wonderful.

john121 posted:
This means using the same pattern of words to show that two or more ideas have the same level of importance.

Actually, grammatical parallelism generally refers to there being shared syntactic status between or among the phrasal conjuncts of coordinate structures. For example, consider the following sentence, which has faulty parallelism:

  • The people were loud, restless, and wanted their money back.

The reason that sentence has faulty parallelism is that the coordinate structure consists of two adjective phrases and a verb phrase. The verb phrase is out of place. The following sentence exhibits parallelism:

  • The people were loud and restless, and wanted their money back.

Now there are two coordinate structures. The adjectives (or adjective phrases) "loud" and "restless" are coordinated, and so are the verb phrases "were loud and restless" and  "wanted their money back."

john121 posted:
I recently wrote about a man entranced by a  pile of diamonds:

"Dazzling, hypnotic, as the multicoloured waterfall caught the lights."

But i was told off, stating that it should be dazzling, hypnotising,

What do you think?

The biggest problem with your sentence is that it is not a sentence at all. There is no problem, from the standpoint of grammatical parallelism, with coordinating the adjectives "dazzling" and "hypnotic."

  • They found the diamonds dazzling and hypnotic.

I actually think that sounds much better than ? "They found the diamonds dazzling and hypnotizing." If we were dealing with progressive verbs, however, "hypnotizing" would be in order:

  • They were dazzling and hypnotizing everyone.
  • The diamonds dazzled and hypnotized us.
  • We felt dazzled and hypnotized.

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