Hey, I have a quick question about this sentence:

"When I joined the softball league this spring, and I walked onto the hot pitch from the bustling street, I knew something important: It was the start of the season"

I am basically using a compound subordinate clause in the beginning of the sentence, but I am not sure how to punctuate it correctly. Should I remove the comma before the "and I walked..."- or is it fine as is (Or do I need to do something else entirely!)

Thanks a lot everybody!

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Hi, Trig1968,

I don't think that comma is necessary, but it isn't wrong, either.

Alternatively, you can say:

"When I joined the softball league this spring and walked onto the hot pitch from the bustling street, I knew something important: it was the start of the season." (No capital for "It.")

However, I still find some inconsistency between the action of joining the league (which actually seems to be a previous, more embracing event) and more specific and simultaneous actions like walking and realizing it was the the start of the season. I would have said:

"When I walked onto the hot pitch from the bustling street after joining the softball league this spring, I knew something important: it was the start of the season."

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