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See the two below examples of this; in each case, the bolded paragraph could be merged with the paragraph above. The issue in each case is that the bolded paragraph comprises a "But"/"And" sequence where the "And" sentence refers back only to the "But" sentence; the danger in each case is that included the bolded sequence with the preceding paragraph (1) makes things quite "busy" and (2) might create ambiguity as to whether the "And" sentence refers back only to the "But" sentence.



Fear-based “messaging can motivate us very effectively if we know how to turn that fear into tangible action”—“if negative news about climate change is immediately followed with information explaining how individuals, communities, businesses, or governments can reduce the threat, then this information can empower rather than discourage us”.

But fear “hampers our ability to think creativity”. And those who are anxious and alarmed “can’t remain alarmed forever”, will eventually “overload and check out”, can collapse into depression and despair, or can even collapse into anger and denial.

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On the emotional front, people lack self-efficacy—they don’t believe that they have the capacity to act so as achieve specific climate-relevant goals. Surveys show that “over 50 percent of Americans feel helpless when they think about climate change”—surveys “of people in different countries show that people’s sense of efficacy when it comes to climate change is not high”.

But your efficacy increases when hear, see, or learn about “what the real solutions look like” and “how many of them are already being implemented or will be in the near future”. And your efficacy also increases when you see another person do something that you can do in your personal life, “find out about something you can do in your personal life”, or find out about something that you’ve already done in your personal life.

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A related quick question too, if that's OK.

Is it clear which sentence the bold "And" links back to?

Pollin’s “higher-end estimate” is that it would take “an average level of investment spending throughout the global economy of about 2.5 percent of global GDP per year”. This investment would go mainly toward energy efficiency and making clean—and competitively priced—renewable energy abundant, but it would also go toward stopping deforestation and supporting afforestation. And this investment would come from both the public and private sector—a “major part of the policy challenge will be to determine how to leverage the public money most effectively to create strong incentives for private investors, large and small, while also maintaining tight regulations over their activities”.

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